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Reviewer: Ange Anonymous Date: 16/06/09 - 11:37 am Title: Chapter 1

God your Severus is perfect. Angry and bitter, but with a dash of compassion and the ability to love. This was spectacularly written, and transitioned nicely from one phase to the next.

Author's Response: Thank you so much. And for taking the time to leave fb on these.

Reviewer: zvi Anonymous Date: 28/08/07 - 09:53 am Title: Chapter 1

I liked it even though it had any number of things I typically shy away from.

Author's Response: Glad the overall thing worked for you!

Reviewer: aeil Anonymous Date: 23/05/07 - 04:32 pm Title: Chapter 1

Ah very nice. Your stories are like a cool drink of water, clear and crisp. It's so nice to have something which is not only well plotted but beautifully written.

The rhythm of the language:

"The fact that I cannot immediately conjure an example does not negate the validity of my assertion"

The choice of words to capture interesting ideas:

"the sound of the falsehood rings high and obvious inside his head"

And as always the beautifully understated and perfectly described relationships:

"You-- I am not as prone toward yelling when around you."

"the question seems inimically cruel, which is something he is only to people who are not Severus."

I did have one question I didn't understand a few of the exchanges between Draco and Severus. To take an example. I don't know what Potter did too means here. - Potter did have his respect?

"Why did you bother restoring those things to me if you planned to continue on as if I was still lacking them?"

"I know you--"

"No you don't."

Severus does, but he knew that Potter did too, he granted Potter that sort of independence and self-authority and that had been a mistake.

Fear is so much easier an emotion than hope. Infinitely more simple. "I do," he says. "But I do not know how to simply let you have it on your own."


Author's Response: Severus knew that Harry could take care of himself (and Harry could) but in the hindsight of Harry being dead, that's a hard thing for him to accept.

As always, thank you so much for your gorgeous feedback. *hugs*

Reviewer: bronze_ribbons Anonymous Date: 22/05/07 - 03:55 pm Title: Chapter 1

Fantastic -- beautifully complex, as ever.

Author's Response: Thank you for all your responses, they warm me.

Reviewer: Saba Anonymous Date: 16/05/07 - 10:00 am Title: Chapter 1

Puh, I'm slow but I'm still enjoying reading your stories a lot :) .
I liked that Severus was Draco's anchor here and that Draco was Severus reason for pretty much all his actions.
Thanks for writing and sharing this!

Author's Response: This was definitely written for a friend, so I wasn't quite sure how it turned out. I'm glad you think it was well-played. Thanks!

Reviewer: xanphibian Anonymous Date: 03/05/07 - 01:35 pm Title: Chapter 1

This is absolutely fantastic. FANTASTIC. I very rarely read this pairing, but I gave it a try since I already know I love your writing, and I doubted you wouldn't do a good job with it. And I was SO right. I trust your writing for a reason! Beautiful, moving, and absolutely gorgeous.

Author's Response: Oh wow. I have to admit, I wasn't feeling terribly proud of this fic, it was hard for me to write, and I just didn't think it was all that solid, but evidently I was at least a little off, because you and Femme both found it to be worthwhile. Thank you so, SO much for the comment, it really makes me feel ten times better.

Reviewer: Femme Anonymous Date: 29/04/07 - 02:23 pm Title: Chapter 1

I LOVE YOU.

Just so you know. I just...God.

This is perfection. Seriously.

Author's Response: You are silly.

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